Mirror+Writing

Second Draft 6/04/09  The young Student looking back at me seems familiar. Her beautiful sky blues eyes twinkle in the sun light. As her mood changes to __mist chive__ her eye colour changes to a hazel with gold sparkles all over. Her long brown hair sometimes forms into a ponytail. As light runs though, her hair gets tints of red all over. She was born in the year 1998. She has very exciting memories, bad ones too. But the one she remembers the most is still stuck in her head, it was the time when she almost ran away. She was a tired and angry two year old, but she refused to go to sleep. __She screamed to try get out of going (does this sound right?)__ to bed but it made the parents think she was even more tired. Little Alicia’s master mind got to work. She hopped out of bed and did the craziest thing ever! She climbed out the window and ran down the street screaming, trying to escape. But, her parents saw her running down the street and stopped her evil plan...then put her to bed.

Her hopes and dreams for the future are to be a zoo keeper but if that is not __seseful__ she would like to be a famous __artiest__. At school her __favorite__ subjects are art, writing and reading. She has lots of friends and has known her best friend for five years. She __try’s__ her best at school. She loves Intermediate but misses Rototuna Primary School lots. She loves Fairfield Intermediate so far she has been there

By Alicia

//**__ Miss Crawford - A great piece of writing, Alicia. There are a few spelling errors that need to be fixed, I have underlined those. __**// I was thinking, could you add more descriptive language to your memory? Describe the night, maybe?